Patricia aged 12 from St Mary's Dunmanway
Sometimes my sister can be really annoying because she is disabled. Wow big deal!
Well it is really! My sister Jane she’s disabled. I’m two years younger that her. She’s my big sister but she doesn’t act like it. Tough! I have to do every thing “Patricia do this, and do that, and go do that,” my mum might say like all the time.
My sister can’t walk or talk. She’s in a wheelchair all her life. I do love my sister. Don’t get me wrong. But I don’t tell people how I would help her with her homework, play with her and maybe tell her all my problems she can’t really speak like me and you, but well she helps in her way.
I’m not ashamed of my sister I love her and she loves me that what’s important, right? I shouldn’t care really what other people think of my sister but I do! I can’t help it. When I go outside, everyone points and stares. Some people don’t know how that feels, and trust me it doesn’t feel good Jane doesn’t care because she doesn’t know what’s happening she just smiles I wish I could smile all the time but I don’t…
Cora Harrison says
This is a very sensitively written piece of work. I would love you to write some more. Is the sister imaginary? It doesn’t matter whether she is or not. What is important is that you manage to convey to your reader the feelings and thoughts of a girl in this situation. What you need to add to it now is some incident which would make the main character in the story feel better about her life – perhaps she manages to teach her sister something that all of the doctors and nurses and therapists have not managed to do – perhaps she saves her sister from some danger – perhaps she suddenly realises that her sister is something positive in her life.