Name: | Brittany | |
Message: | Cora I added my part of the story twice on accedent sorry. | |
Dated: | Tue Aug 23 03:11:58 2005 | |
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Name: | Brittany | |
Message: | Cora- By accedent I called part two of my story part one | |
Dated: | Tue Aug 23 02:04:46 2005 | |
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Name: | Brittany | |
Message: | Cora I wanted to thank you for all of your imput on my stories you realy desereve something for what you do. | |
Dated: | Tue Aug 23 01:53:16 2005 | |
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Name: | Brittany | |
Message: | Thank you soo much ursalayou made my day. You are also brillant writer. I love the story about the twins. I often forgot that an adult didn't write it | |
Dated: | Tue Aug 23 01:48:31 2005 | |
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Name: | Ursula | |
Message: | Hi Cora I just wanted to say I changed bits and pieces of my story and added more dialogue and it really helped it and I just wanted to say thanks I think I'll add the next section in a few days as it's moving along quite fast and I don't want to give people a huge bit to read all at once. Thanks again Ursula | |
Dated: | Tue Aug 23 00:38:54 2005 | |
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Name: | Ursula | |
Message: | Brittany;Wow I would just like to say you are a brilliant writer, I just read three of you stories and they were all brilliant, a tear came to my eye in the untitled one and the love you forever and always. Anyways just wanted to say I really liked them and I can't wait to read your next one. | |
Dated: | Tue Aug 23 00:33:46 2005 | |
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Name: | Cora Harrison | |
Message: | Brittany & Bridget: I've just put your latest stories on the Story Club Board. Sorry for the delay. I've been a bit snowed under. | |
Dated: | Mon Aug 22 21:03:45 2005 | |
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Name: | Cora Harrison | |
Message: | Cillian: Sci Fi is not my sort of thing so I may not be too much help, but my feeling is that you are packing too much into your story too quickly. I would go on with the story of Magnet from the words: GAME OVER and that was it! 1 minute and they were done on the way back to base... If you want to do some more continuing on from this I would be able to insert it. Quite honestly I think you have enough ideas there for a full length book, but you need to stay within the scene and involve your reader - make the story dramatic. Don't tell what happened straight away. Keep your reader guessing. | |
Dated: | Mon Aug 22 20:24:03 2005 | |
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Name: | Cillian | |
Message: | Cora, I don't know what to add onto the Sci-fi story i'm writing, and suggestions? | |
Dated: | Mon Aug 22 18:30:22 2005 | |
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Name: | Cora Harrison | |
Message: | The story is working out really well. It's very tense and exciting. Cillian & Sarah: When I have a little more time I will sort out your bits, but my first impression is that it all reads very well. Sarah: Cillian is right; just start writing. You can send it to me in short chapters if you like. Did you read Ursula's story? | |
Dated: | Mon Aug 22 18:13:11 2005 | |
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Name: | Cillian | |
Message: | Sarah: Thanks, ut i'll think i'll leave it till some other people write some other bits! | |
Dated: | Mon Aug 22 15:57:45 2005 | |
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Name: | Sarah | |
Message: | Cillian:Your not spoiling it!I've just read it & it makes the story really exiting. | |
Dated: | Mon Aug 22 15:24:33 2005 | |
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Name: | Cillian | |
Message: | I added another bit on, I hope i'm not spoiling the story by adding alot of peices! | |
Dated: | Mon Aug 22 15:18:20 2005 | |
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Name: | Cillian | |
Message: | Actually, I did leave it in a bad place.... | |
Dated: | Mon Aug 22 14:56:56 2005 | |
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Name: | Sarah | |
Message: | Cillian:I can't think of what to add on now so I'll wait for someonelse to add on something before I do. | |
Dated: | Mon Aug 22 14:54:46 2005 | |
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Name: | Sarah | |
Message: | Cora:Or how about you add a part before my last one about the three criminals heading for a stream that ran through the field & only seeing it at the last minute.Then the driver breaks but it's too late so the three of them hop out & try to escape on foot! | |
Dated: | Mon Aug 22 14:50:12 2005 | |
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Name: | Cillian | |
Message: | Sarah: You made more sense!! | |
Dated: | Mon Aug 22 14:46:00 2005 | |
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Name: | Sarah | |
Message: | Cora Harrison:Cillian just had the idea of you putting a part about the suv turning over before the last piece I added.I think it's a great idea. | |
Dated: | Mon Aug 22 14:43:40 2005 | |
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Name: | Cillian | |
Message: | Dear Cora, In the storyclub story, Sarah was writing a bit that was meant before mine but I finished my bit first (the bit were the main crimanal, kills the policeman) so it doesn't make sense, so before sarahs one could you put a bit were the suv topples? I hope that made sense!! | |
Dated: | Mon Aug 22 14:42:30 2005 | |
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Name: | Sarah | |
Message: | Cillian:That's a brilliant idea!Then it would all make sense. | |
Dated: | Mon Aug 22 14:36:35 2005 | |
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Name: | Cillian | |
Message: | We could ask Cora to put before your bit, something about the suv toppling? | |
Dated: | Mon Aug 22 14:28:17 2005 | |
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Name: | Sarah | |
Message: | Cillian:Okay.I just read your bit & it's great! | |
Dated: | Mon Aug 22 14:27:12 2005 | |
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Name: | Cillian | |
Message: | Its okay, Cora will fix it but i think it still works out | |
Dated: | Mon Aug 22 14:23:33 2005 | |
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Name: | Sarah | |
Message: | Cillian:Oops!My bit was meant to go before yours.Sorry! | |
Dated: | Mon Aug 22 14:15:28 2005 | |
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Name: | Cillian | |
Message: | Was that your addition it was good! | |
Dated: | Mon Aug 22 13:53:17 2005 | |
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