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Name: Sarah
Message:Cora Harrison:Ok.I'm writing a story now & I haven't finished it yet but I'll put it in the StoryClub soon.Oh yeah,I'll read Ursela's story too.
Dated:Tue Aug 23 20:13:45 2005  

Name: Cora Harrison
Message:Leanne: I think if you read your bit again you will see that you just say John was lying on the ground. He needn't have been dead. Brittany obviously didn't realise that was what you intended. I think it would have been a pity if he died because that might have ended the story too abruptly.
Dated:Tue Aug 23 20:09:41 2005  

Name: leanne
Message:Hey Cora!I WROTE ON THE STORY BOARD AND THE MURDERER KILLED JOHN AND THE NEXT DAY WHEN I LOGGED ON TO THE STORY CLUB JOHN WAS ALIVE AGAIN.ISNT THAT RUINING MY PART OF THE STORY?
Dated:Tue Aug 23 19:20:01 2005  

Name: Brittany
Message:Sinead and Rachel are doing great. They just went home from the U.S last week. They are now at a camp for Gailic football.
Dated:Tue Aug 23 16:17:43 2005  

Name: Cillian
Message:I think that you should put that the twins were fighting and the main bad guy got distracted and he hit a fence, the car toppled, the police came and they all ran?
Dated:Tue Aug 23 14:12:11 2005  

Name: Cillian
Message:Thanks for the idea
Dated:Tue Aug 23 13:54:58 2005  

Name: Cora Harrison
Message:Cillian: I was thinking about your problem and I think what I would do is to jot all those ideas down in a notebook on your computer and then make a list under each idea of what is going to happen. For instance:
1 Describe the scene under the trees (what is each person doing? What is each person feeling?)
Dated:Tue Aug 23 12:51:44 2005  

Name: Cora Harrison
Message:Brittany: I've put your part two on to your story.
I think it might be a good idea to think of a title. It doesn't look so inviting without one. You can always change it when the book is finished. I sometimes do that.
How are your cousins, Sinead and Rachel. I haven't heard from them for a while. I hope they are well.
Dated:Tue Aug 23 12:48:28 2005  

Name: Brittany
Message:Cora I added my part of the story twice on accedent sorry.
Dated:Tue Aug 23 03:11:58 2005  

Name: Brittany
Message:Cora- By accedent I called part two of my story part one
Dated:Tue Aug 23 02:04:46 2005  

Name: Brittany
Message:Cora I wanted to thank you for all of your imput on my stories you realy desereve something for what you do.
Dated:Tue Aug 23 01:53:16 2005  

Name: Brittany
Message:Thank you soo much ursalayou made my day. You are also brillant writer. I love the story about the twins. I often forgot that an adult didn't write it
Dated:Tue Aug 23 01:48:31 2005  

Name: Ursula
Message:Hi Cora
I just wanted to say I changed bits and pieces of my story and added more dialogue and it really helped it and I just wanted to say thanks I think I'll add the next section in a few days as it's moving along quite fast and I don't want to give people a huge bit to read all at once.
Thanks again
Ursula
Dated:Tue Aug 23 00:38:54 2005  

Name: Ursula
Message:Brittany;Wow I would just like to say you are a brilliant writer, I just read three of you stories and they were all brilliant, a tear came to my eye in the untitled one and the love you forever and always. Anyways just wanted to say I really liked them and I can't wait to read your next one.
Dated:Tue Aug 23 00:33:46 2005  

Name: Cora Harrison
Message:Brittany & Bridget: I've just put your latest stories on the Story Club Board. Sorry for the delay. I've been a bit snowed under.
Dated:Mon Aug 22 21:03:45 2005  

Name: Cora Harrison
Message:Cillian: Sci Fi is not my sort of thing so I may not be too much help, but my feeling is that you are packing too much into your story too quickly. I would go on with the story of Magnet from the words:
GAME OVER and that was it! 1 minute and they were done on the way back to base...
If you want to do some more continuing on from this I would be able to insert it. Quite honestly I think you have enough ideas there for a full length book, but you need to stay within the scene and involve your reader - make the story dramatic. Don't tell what happened straight away. Keep your reader guessing.
Dated:Mon Aug 22 20:24:03 2005  

Name: Cillian
Message:Cora,
I don't know what to add onto the Sci-fi story i'm writing, and suggestions?
Dated:Mon Aug 22 18:30:22 2005  

Name: Cora Harrison
Message:The story is working out really well. It's very tense and exciting.

Cillian & Sarah: When I have a little more time I will sort out your bits, but my first impression is that it all reads very well.

Sarah: Cillian is right; just start writing. You can send it to me in short chapters if you like. Did you read Ursula's story?
Dated:Mon Aug 22 18:13:11 2005  

Name: Cillian
Message:Sarah:
Thanks,
ut i'll think i'll leave it till some other people write some other bits!
Dated:Mon Aug 22 15:57:45 2005  

Name: Sarah
Message:Cillian:Your not spoiling it!I've just read it & it makes the story really exiting.
Dated:Mon Aug 22 15:24:33 2005  

Name: Cillian
Message:I added another bit on, I hope i'm not spoiling the story by adding alot of peices!
Dated:Mon Aug 22 15:18:20 2005  

Name: Cillian
Message:Actually, I did leave it in a bad place....
Dated:Mon Aug 22 14:56:56 2005  

Name: Sarah
Message:Cillian:I can't think of what to add on now so I'll wait for someonelse to add on something before I do.
Dated:Mon Aug 22 14:54:46 2005  

Name: Sarah
Message:Cora:Or how about you add a part before my last one about the three criminals heading for a stream that ran through the field & only seeing it at the last minute.Then the driver breaks but it's too late so the three of them hop out & try to escape on foot!
Dated:Mon Aug 22 14:50:12 2005  

Name: Cillian
Message:Sarah:
You made more sense!!
Dated:Mon Aug 22 14:46:00 2005  

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